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Categories Literature > Poetry > Human Nature > Open


terrribly destructive
his mind is a weapon
breaks hearts
tears apart minds
leaves all in his wake
this is the world he dosent belong on
they dont understand
so he tears them apart
to die in the mind and rot on the outside
follow the path of psycosis
you will find him
and he will obliterate you
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a poem
still have writers block

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~litlumanuth Feb 23, 2006, 4:27:59 AM
i think its pretty cool

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'i am attempting to kill, the little boy inside.'
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*Garnet-43 Feb 23, 2006, 4:48:38 AM
"to die in the mind and rot on the outside"

Mental violence. Interesting.

Mental attacks can be just as deadly as physical, and more painful, I guess.

Thought provoking poem.

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"And the day came when the risk to remain tight in a bud was more painful than the risk it took to blossom." - Anais Nin
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~RejectFalseIcons Feb 24, 2006, 2:01:02 AM
thanx man:)

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All of which makes me anxious, at times unbearably so
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~RejectFalseIcons Feb 24, 2006, 2:01:33 AM
thank you
i like making people think

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All of which makes me anxious, at times unbearably so
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~litlumanuth Feb 24, 2006, 3:20:13 AM
:)

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'i am attempting to kill, the little boy inside.'
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~dontkillthellama Feb 24, 2006, 5:21:00 AM
maybe line 4 should be tears minds apart... i think it flows better...
line 6 this is th world he doesn't belong to... is that a better way to put it?
but other than that, i love it :) :+fav: i think :P

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'Shut up and get on. I hear the law!'
You know you want to see my stuff, so click
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~RejectFalseIcons Feb 24, 2006, 6:09:00 AM
:)

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All of which makes me anxious, at times unbearably so
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~RejectFalseIcons Feb 24, 2006, 6:10:48 AM
thanx ash
im not happy with it but
its the first thing ive written in ages
and i still feel a writers block

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All of which makes me anxious, at times unbearably so
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~dontkillthellama Feb 24, 2006, 6:40:55 AM
well try my suggestions
please lol... i think it will make it better...

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'Shut up and get on. I hear the law!'
You know you want to see my stuff, so click
~dontkillthellama
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